Sean Glover 4 Posted February 26, 2020 https://www.autotrader.co.uk/classified/advert/202002247656343?advertising-location=at_cars&is-quick-search=TRUE&postcode=HP18 9LY&page=1&radius=1&onesearchad=Used&onesearchad=Nearly New&onesearchad=New&advertClassification=standard Here’s my advert what’s good what’s bad any thoughts on car etc any feedback/help much appreciated Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
D&M 66 Posted February 26, 2020 You've posted the owners name and address in one of the photos of the invoice - so I'd get that gone. The pics aren't really in the right order and a couple are a little blurry, and the front tyres are really muddy. We have all the exterior pics first, then interior, then any special features, then paperwork. You look like you are in quite a confined space, if you can't get back a little further I'd consider a different location. You're camera has picked out all the dust in the interior, so the inside looks a bit grubby. Also, the way the seats are set makes the car look like its going to be very uncomfortable. Doesn't look like there is any space in the front, but loads of legroom in the back. Not a bad effort, few tweaks here and there. Are you happy, have you looked through from a potential customers point of view? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Mojo121 229 Posted February 26, 2020 Super top pro level Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
NOACROSS 414 Posted February 26, 2020 Perfectly fine. Well done. Yes maybe room for slight improvements as mentioned but I wouldn’t sweat it. Different location for the pics if possible, with less background clutter going on yes. There’s one typo ‘histry’. People click through to the website more than focus on the ad anyway. Well done on the whole from me. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
New year revolutions...... 197 Posted February 26, 2020 Hi bit of bum fluff in some of the switches need attention Good effort 9/10 Never show the document ref number on the swindle sheet, someone with a grudge could advise dvla it's been sold or exported etc with it Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Halfpenny 114 Posted February 27, 2020 I think your camera lens is dusty? Either that or quite a bit of dust on dash etc. Clean the front tyres, adjust the front seats and blur out identifying information on docs. Looks a nice enough car and given where you are located I am sure you'll find a customer fairly quickly so don't fret too much. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sean Glover 4 Posted February 27, 2020 10 hours ago, NOACROSS said: Perfectly fine. Well done. Yes maybe room for slight improvements as mentioned but I wouldn’t sweat it. Different location for the pics if possible, with less background clutter going on yes. There’s one typo ‘histry’. People click through to the website more than focus on the ad anyway. Well done on the whole from me. The typo was because the attention grabber only allows certain amount of characters 11 hours ago, D&M said: You've posted the owners name and address in one of the photos of the invoice - so I'd get that gone. The pics aren't really in the right order and a couple are a little blurry, and the front tyres are really muddy. We have all the exterior pics first, then interior, then any special features, then paperwork. You look like you are in quite a confined space, if you can't get back a little further I'd consider a different location. You're camera has picked out all the dust in the interior, so the inside looks a bit grubby. Also, the way the seats are set makes the car look like its going to be very uncomfortable. Doesn't look like there is any space in the front, but loads of legroom in the back. Not a bad effort, few tweaks here and there. Are you happy, have you looked through from a potential customers point of view? The owners is sadly not with us anymore 11 hours ago, Mojo121 said: Super top pro level Thanks Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Casper 272 Posted February 27, 2020 Looks ok maybe some better pictures and move the rear number plate down to cover the what looks like old double sided tape . But I'm just picky with stuff like that Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Nick M.K. 574 Posted February 27, 2020 (edited) 1) Step away from the car when taking photos, the proportions looks better from a little distance with some added zoom. Image order needs to keep buyers engaged so you can mixed them up and you can add some finance logos, HPI logos etc for good measure. 2) Remove close up interior photos where the displays look dirty. 3) Clean the front tyres just before taking the pictures 4) Remove some BLOCK CAPITALS from your advert text and structure it a bit better. First a bit about yourself, the business, then the car basics, then the spec and options, then history, MOT etc and finally a long section about what you offer and why they should buy from you and not someone else. In the case of this car mention a careful mature owner as it is a good plus point. Add more wording and options in the advert text as it will give you a better price indicator. 5) Zuto. Your adverts show a finance APR of 19.6% compared to 7-8% of your competition so consider paying AT the £30 or so a month for your own finance example to be displayed there. 6) NEW CAMBELT+FULL SUZUKI HISTRY I get what you mean about the space but you can reword better to FULL SUZUKI SH or even SUZUKI FSH or FSH by SUZUKI to fit everything in. 7) Reply to your reviews. Thank you for your purchase, thank you for part exchanging, thank you for letting us take care of your finance, Thank you for recommending us etc 8) Round prices. Yes they increase views but sometimes put you way down in search results so maybe experiment with exact prices a bit to see what works better: £6991 looks like it's been more carefully thought and calculated than £7000 for example. 9) Work to improve your AT HIGH price indicators without having to lower your asking price. You have a black MINI Coupe £6500 that looks to me like it has Chili pack. If you were to select Cooper (Chili) as the derivative your HIGH Price will be Good or Great with all options added. 10) I'll stop here but maybe elaborate a bit on your 3 months warranty, is it parts and labour, is it free, can it be extended for longer at a price etc... Actually I just spec checked that MINI, it does have Chili pack and a whole host of other options, the £6500 price now looks like a real bargain: https://www.mdecoder.com/decode/t455304 Edited February 27, 2020 by Nick M.K. 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sean Glover 4 Posted February 27, 2020 47 minutes ago, Nick M.K. said: 1) Step away from the car when taking photos, the proportions looks better from a little distance with some added zoom. Image order needs to keep buyers engaged so you can mixed them up and you can add some finance logos, HPI logos etc for good measure. 2) Remove close up interior photos where the displays look dirty. 3) Clean the front tyres just before taking the pictures 4) Remove some BLOCK CAPITALS from your advert text and structure it a bit better. First a bit about yourself, the business, then the car basics, then the spec and options, then history, MOT etc and finally a long section about what you offer and why they should buy from you and not someone else. In the case of this car mention a careful mature owner as it is a good plus point. Add more wording and options in the advert text as it will give you a better price indicator. 5) Zuto. Your adverts show a finance APR of 19.6% compared to 7-8% of your competition so consider paying AT the £30 or so a month for your own finance example to be displayed there. 6) NEW CAMBELT+FULL SUZUKI HISTRY I get what you mean about the space but you can reword better to FULL SUZUKI SH or even SUZUKI FSH or FSH by SUZUKI to fit everything in. 7) Reply to your reviews. Thank you for your purchase, thank you for part exchanging, thank you for letting us take care of your finance, Thank you for recommending us etc 8) Round prices. Yes they increase views but sometimes put you way down in search results so maybe experiment with exact prices a bit to see what works better: £6991 looks like it's been more carefully thought and calculated than £7000 for example. 9) Work to improve your AT HIGH price indicators without having to lower your asking price. You have a black MINI Coupe £6500 that looks to me like it has Chili pack. If you were to select Cooper (Chili) as the derivative your HIGH Price will be Good or Great with all options added. 10) I'll stop here but maybe elaborate a bit on your 3 months warranty, is it parts and labour, is it free, can it be extended for longer at a price etc... Actually I just spec checked that MINI, it does have Chili pack and a whole host of other options, the £6500 price now looks like a real bargain: https://www.mdecoder.com/decode/t455304 Is it a chilli pack? How do you know that? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Nick M.K. 574 Posted February 27, 2020 Did you click on the link at the bottom of my reply? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sean Glover 4 Posted February 27, 2020 4 minutes ago, Nick M.K. said: Did you click on the link at the bottom of my reply? Yeah 4 minutes ago, Nick M.K. said: Did you click on the link at the bottom of my reply? Does that work with every car? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Nick M.K. 574 Posted February 27, 2020 there are sites for every brand yes This is for Bmw or Mini only Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sean Glover 4 Posted February 27, 2020 1 minute ago, Nick M.K. said: there are sites for every brand yes This is for Bmw or Mini only Ok thanks how do you find VIN number I’m new to this Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Nick M.K. 574 Posted February 27, 2020 In your case: look in the V5 or in the car. In mine: load it on AT from the reg, do a free Experian data check and copy from there. 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Highlinev8 28 Posted February 27, 2020 7 minutes ago, Sean Glover said: Ok thanks how do you find VIN number I’m new to this https://checkmyreg.com/ Works with 50%ish of cars 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sean Glover 4 Posted February 27, 2020 7 minutes ago, Highlinev8 said: https://checkmyreg.com/ Works with 50%ish of cars Cheers 16 minutes ago, Nick M.K. said: there are sites for every brand yes This is for Bmw or Mini only Are the other websites for all cars? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
marc_p 6 Posted February 27, 2020 (edited) From my photo point of view and not wanting to repeat what others have said, my advice would be to make sure that on the close detail photos, the car is really clean and you are highlighting the condition (and make sure it's in focus ) Edited February 27, 2020 by marc_p 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites