is my ad good enough

[arslan2468 1]

hi guys,

was just wondering if you could critique my ad and see if there anything i can improve and improve for future ads. This is the most expensive car that i have brought so far and not 100% on how much ive got it up for sale either, any criticism will help 

https://www.ebay.co.uk/itm/263437921070?ssPageName=STRK:MESELX:IT&_trksid=p3984.m1555.l2649

Car is also on auto trader too, 

thanks 

[MrC 142]

Id do the pictures somewhere better than a public car park.

 

[Tom 164]

This forum is for car dealers

Are you a dealer? No other stock and nothing found for  ARJ  car sales? No mention of any warranty etc?

[Arfur Dealy 823]

6 hours ago, Tom said:

This forum is for car dealers

Are you a dealer? No other stock and nothing found for  ARJ  car sales? No mention of any warranty etc?

+1 the advert looks like you are Trade hiding as a private seller. You need to be registered as a business seller. Find a better backdrop to take pictures. 

[Mojo121 229]

As I said on another thread you're just knocking out the odd car here and there del boy style "no income tax no VAT no money back no guarantee". It's not a business. You'll find people are reluctant to hand over nearly 13 bags.

[Rory RSC 596]

Will you take £9.5k for it today?

[AutoJacob 34]

What's the last price mate?

 

[trade vet 703]

I am not sure why you guys are giving Arslan a hard time.He has already said he is a student and doing one per month.He is declaring himself as trade on AT.He is just looking for advice like all the others.He appears to me to be quite enterprising for a young guy.There is no need for him to register for VAT or as a company at the moment.....Anybody agree !

[Rory RSC 596]

3 minutes ago, trade vet said:

I am not sure why you guys are giving Arslan a hard time.He has already said he is a student and doing one per month.He is declaring himself as trade on AT.He is just looking for advice like all the others.He appears to me to be quite enterprising for a young guy.There is no need for him to register for VAT or as a company at the moment.....Anybody agree !

I'm not we all start somewhere. I will also buy it if he wants rid as always do well with S3 models and have my work cut out buying this week 

I never registered for VAT until I needed to, learned along the way and started with a couple of cars. Turned out ok so far if you work hard enough. 

[Dan W 57]

12 hours ago, arslan2468 said:

hi guys,

was just wondering if you could critique my ad and see if there anything i can improve and improve for future ads. This is the most expensive car that i have brought so far and not 100% on how much ive got it up for sale either, any criticism will help 

https://www.ebay.co.uk/itm/263437921070?ssPageName=STRK:MESELX:IT&_trksid=p3984.m1555.l2649

Car is also on auto trader too, 

thanks 

Advert looks good and Professional, Agree with some of the others the photos could be taken in a better place car park does not look great.

[Arfur Dealy 823]

3 minutes ago, trade vet said:

I am not sure why you guys are giving Arslan a hard time.He has already said he is a student and doing one per month.He is declaring himself as trade on AT.He is just looking for advice like all the others.He appears to me to be quite enterprising for a young guy.There is no need for him to register for VAT or as a company at the moment.....Anybody agree !

I don’t think he’s been given a hard time, he’s asked for advice and from the look of his advert IMO he looks dodgy, especially when billy asked how long he’s had it for.... He’s getting fair feedback. 

There’s nothing wrong with what he is doing, but when you are buying to sell you are a business and that should be made clear to the customer on eBay. It’ll give him legitimacy and help him sell the car  

[justina3 518]

Stay away from the vat man for as long as you possibly can within the letter of the law of course, your pictures look ok i always try and keep them at the same distance your first picture is a good one then the next one is a couple of feet back i would try and be more consistent.

Your wording is ok a little ott on the been loved theme remember most German buyers dig into every single detail just a quick look at the mot history and when a VAG buyer sees this on the last two mot's he will be out measuring every inch of rubber 

• Nearside Front Tyre worn close to the legal limit (4.1.E.1)
• Offside Front Tyre worn close to the legal limit (4.1.E.1)

[Tadams 29]

First line contradicts it's self ..  "This Audi has not been modified in any way apart from a stage 1 remap" so in actual fact it has been modified so the first line his pointless or/and a lie.  

Try "The car has been tastefully modified to add to the already exceptional power of the S3, these modifications included (insert supporting mods) were carried out by a performance Audi specialist (insert specialist name). 



 

[rich89 11]

I really hate it when adverts say 'not modified in any way...... except....'

Really pisses me off.

Same as 'Amazing condition inside and out..... except...'.

[whitestone679231 113]

I wouldn't be mentioning any mods at all,, if the customer asks then fair enough but don't get them thinking bout mods,,, automatically starts them thinking of spotty boy racer sticking a drain pipe on after he has cut cat off and racing along Blackpool prom,,, init bruv.

[Tadams 29]

5 minutes ago, whitestone679231 said:

I wouldn't be mentioning any mods at all,, if the customer asks then fair enough but don't get them thinking bout mods,,, automatically starts them thinking of spotty boy racer sticking a drain pipe on after he has cut cat off and racing along Blackpool prom,,, init bruv.

It's now a 6 owner car (i guess OP has registered in to himself now so no longer the 5 that's in the advert) manual S3 for not big money these days so chances are what you have described is exactly whats happened  

I guess sometimes you play to the car's strength's .. you may well deter some buyers saying it's been modified but equally it appeals the another group who don't want to spend the money modifying it themselves.

Like i said above i think if you are honest and give as much info about any modifications as possible it's not always a bad thing, If it's been done by a well known name in the VAG scene it's 100% a plus factor. 

[arslan2468 1]

Thanks for getting back to guys, I have advertised myself on auto trader as a trade seller, wasn't aware that i needed to do that on eBay too. The S3 was more of a vehicle that i saw for the right price but also wanted to keep for a little while, never really sold a car for this much money before but now its time to sell the vehicle on. I knew the location wasnt the best so will be scouting for a better back drop this week and have new pictures up soon. whenever i do sell a vehicle i do say that i am a part time trader that trades from home. The price that i put the vehicle up for is fairly high but I'm not in a hurry to sell the vehicle either so can hold onto it. The tyres have been changed, and the way i described the vehicle is legit as honest as i could be its probably the most perfect condition vehicle i own consider my current car was brought from the showroom. ill change the back drop and also the wording for the modification. i am still under the tax barrier even though i am working part time too so won't need to look at registering a company etc just yet. 

anything else i should look at?

thanks for your feedback guys 

[NoMargin 11]

Is this the only car you have for sale, if so next I would buy a few cheaper cars, instead of one big juicy one,  at least if it don't sell the others might and don't start driving it for your own personal use, you'll fall in love and get attached, and what if something goes wrong with it, what will you do then. Get a cheapy to run yourself around in. And definitely redo your photos consistently. 

[Arfur Dealy 823]

2 hours ago, arslan2468 said:

Thanks for getting back to guys, I have advertised myself on auto trader as a trade seller, wasn't aware that i needed to do that on eBay too. The S3 was more of a vehicle that i saw for the right price but also wanted to keep for a little while, never really sold a car for this much money before but now its time to sell the vehicle on. I knew the location wasnt the best so will be scouting for a better back drop this week and have new pictures up soon. whenever i do sell a vehicle i do say that i am a part time trader that trades from home. The price that i put the vehicle up for is fairly high but I'm not in a hurry to sell the vehicle either so can hold onto it. The tyres have been changed, and the way i described the vehicle is legit as honest as i could be its probably the most perfect condition vehicle i own consider my current car was brought from the showroom. ill change the back drop and also the wording for the modification. i am still under the tax barrier even though i am working part time too so won't need to look at registering a company etc just yet. 

anything else i should look at?

thanks for your feedback guys 

You have to state clearly in your eBay advert you are a Trade seller and amend your account to a business account. Buying a car and registering it in your name will not absolve your retail responsibility, you are part time trader and have asked for advice. I respect that, but you have to do it properly otherwise you reflect badly on all traders who do it right..